On my holiday i went to jakarta with my family together we played, shopping and many more . I was very happy that i could met my cousin there . we played together, shopping together . And I watched a movie, the movie is called Newmoon me and my cousin really liked it . But the next day my cousin was getting married so we didn't see all the movie . The next day my cousin is became a very beautiful bride and my other cousin became the a very beautiful bridesmaid . and then the wedding was very grand wedding and everybody liked it . My cousin was very nervous and i tried to made her not so nervous . And the wedding began and everybody saw the bride and the groom and after the wedding me and my family took a picture and after that me and my family went home .
Amanda, nice effort, but please pay attention to the punctuation like: ' On ...., I went to Jakarta together with my family.' Then you begin with new sentence. Don't forget to use capital word for I. What else? Oh yess..... it happened in past time, so you had to use V2. :-))
BalasHapusKeep practicing.
thank you ma'am
BalasHapus